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Copperfield

2-10-2 Poetry

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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written 2-10-2 poem about the effects of neglect on children that make them look older years before their time. The eyes tell the story better than anything else.

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2018


reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
    Thank you Sandra for the review and encouraging comments.
Comment from RodG
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Easy to see why this one won the ribbon. Your poem captures the essence of that great photograph. Congratulations on your win! Rod

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2018


reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
    Thank you very much RodG. I appreciate your comments and encouragement. Melissa
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
    Thank you very much RodG. I appreciate your comments and encouragement. Melissa
Comment from Dean Kuch
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I agree, Anonymous Poet.
The looks in the eyes of pictures of children like this suffering from starvation and poverty bring to mind what we called in the Marine Corps "The Thousand Yard Stare." Grunts in the field who have seen the horrors of combat often acquire this whether they want to or not.
It's as if they can see beyond this earthly realm and into the next.
Good composition of your 2-10-2 and a pertinent topic indeed.

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2018


reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
    Thank you very much.
reply by Dean Kuch on 25-Jul-2018
    You're welcome.
    Good luck!
Comment from Mary Hollingsworth
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Yes Writer these two conditions when inflicted upon and or experienced by children takes them into an areana of void and worry that reflects in their eyes because their missing the main ingredients that keeps them youthful and that is Love.

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2018


reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
    Thanks so much for your comments and review.
reply by Mary Hollingsworth on 25-Jul-2018
    Thanks for sharing
Comment from Debbie Pope
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This is a powerful entry for this contest. "Old eyes" is such a wonderful way to depict the sadness of neglect. It literally pours from their eyes. There is no light. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2018


reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
    Thank you Debbie.
Comment from Kerry Robinson
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Ohhhhh.... How very sad this 2-10-2 poem is, but so very true.
"cause small children to wear old eyes." I like the way you phrased that.
Nicely done! Good luck! ~Kerry

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2018


reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
    Thank you.
reply by Kerry Robinson on 26-Jul-2018
    Welcome.
Comment from June Sargent
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Such profound sentiments expressed in three short lines. Sad eyes reflect a heavy heart. Tragic when it's a child. We just can't keep looking away.

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2018


reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
    Thank you for a great review.
Comment from victor 66
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It seems that in other countries and perhaps even in the U.S., adults have used and abused children forever. How can the human race have evolved for so many centuries and yet we do not feel the need for compassion. I don't have much hope for mankind, now or ever. This was a good write and a good read. Good luck.

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2018


reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
    Thank you Victor.
reply by victor 66 on 24-Jul-2018
    You are welcome.
Comment from The Death
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Your poem highlights one of the bitter truths of our society. Good choice to have a single sentence running across three lines. Excellent word economy. The picture compliments your words well. Good luck!

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2018


reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
    Thank you for the great review. Much appreciated.
Comment from Boogienights
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This is an excellent entry in the 2-10-2 contest. You are right, children who lack in basic comforts and especially in love of family lose the Joy's of life. They see the world as a hard place. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2018


reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
    Thanks so much.