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Shiner

75-word flash fiction

19 total reviews 
Comment from dragonpoet
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Well this guy does have an imagination to think of so many different ways to have received his black eye. It is funny how he got it. It could have while they slept or during other activities.

Congrats on the win. Keep writing

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
    Thanks!
    This was fun to write.
reply by dragonpoet on 23-Jun-2019
    No problem.
    Joan
Comment from Maria Jose Garcia
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This is a great story. I have really enjoyed reading it. You deserve the win. You've packed lot in just 75 words and the ending is very funny.
Congratulations!

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
    Thanks!
    This was fun to write.
Comment from juliaSjames
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I enjoyed the gentle satire of this piece. Gary is an inveterate liar who changes his story depending on his audience. Looks as though he's lying to his wife too.

Congratulations on your win.

Blessings Julia

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
    Thanks!
    This was fun to write.
Comment from Lance Loria
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Cute story and congratulations on your win. This was an enjoyable read. Complimentary photo artwork. No
Edits or adjustments necessary.

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
    Thanks! this was fun to write.
Comment from rama devi
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Cl;ever closing twist. Clever characterization. Excellent flash fiction style, pacing and delivery. I can see why it won. Kudos and congrats!

Warmly,
rd

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
    Thanks!
    This was fun to write.
reply by rama devi on 21-Jun-2019
    :-)
Comment from lyenochka
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Lol. I like your banter about the lawyers and lying and how he is protective of his wife so he makes up stories about the reason for the shiner. Congratulations on the win!

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
    Thanks! This was fun to write.
Comment from Artasylum
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This was excellent and congratulations with your first place win... Bad day indeed... It was a fun exploration into our need to create drama around our life... yours, di

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
    Thanks! This was fun to write!
Comment from Contests

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A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry.

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
    Thanks!
    This story was fun to write.
Comment from Rikki66
Exceptional
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I do not know why he lied; if he told the truth no one would believe it anyway. Tripping in the bathroom is an obvious lie, the chainsaw is plausible. The bedroom is so real-it is made-up.

 Comment Written 20-May-2019


reply by the author on 20-May-2019
    Thanks for the six stars, Rikki! This was fun to write.
reply by Rikki66 on 20-May-2019
    Most welcome, well earned.
    Rikki
Comment from Alex Rosel
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Ha, ha. A nice entry for this contest. I saw the twist coming, but that didn't make it any the less effective.

I particularly like the distinct voices of the intern, the assistant district attorney, and Sharon. :)

Good luck with the competition :)

 Comment Written 20-May-2019


reply by the author on 20-May-2019
    Thanks, Alex!
    This was fun to write.