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Comment from mvbrooks
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This message should be printed at the top of an obituary newspaper page as a reminder to not just consider those who have passed--but also, those who we need to see "at last."

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 03-Jun-2019
    Thanks.
    Sadly, this is a true story for me. That photo is my Uncle Ray, who passed away last week.
reply by mvbrooks on 03-Jun-2019
    I'm sorry for your loss--the poem is a positive tribute and I hope being able to express how important he was in this poem is some comfort to you.
Comment from Richard J
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Ohhh!
What a poignant admonishment to visit and spend time with your loved ones now, while you still can.
What a powerfully and beautifully presented, heart-touching piece this truly is.

There is such a variety of excellently designed, written, and presented entries in this contest, it is difficult to determine who might win, but this one certainly should do quite well.

Thank you sincerely for sharing your very fine poem! ~ Richard : )

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 03-Jun-2019
    Thanks!
    Sadly, this is a true story for me, the photo is my Uncle Ray, who died last Thursday.
Comment from Huberta van Akkeren
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Unfortunately, I find this piece disjointed, the is no rhythm as I assume was intended. I did like the sense of the missed opportunity to visit the uncle as unfortunately so often happens. Perhaps reading the piece aloud could help with the cadence.

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 Comment Written 03-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 03-Jun-2019
    I do not see any requirement in the contest rules about rhythm in the poem. It is free verse.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written thirty four syllable poem about regret we often find out too late. When we feel the urge to do something we should not hesitate to do it as soon as possible.

 Comment Written 02-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 02-Jun-2019
    Thank you, Sandra.
Comment from Bill Schott
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This thirty-four-syllable poem, Regret, has the correct syllable count and finds me as I hear of my brother's death on Monday. He lived in Alaska and we haven't spoken in years.

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 01-Jun-2019
    My sympathy to you.
    This story is true for me too; the photo is of my Uncle Ray, who died Thursday night.
Comment from Debra White
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Hello,
A sad and unfortunately too often true situation addressed in your short poem.
Why do we find so hard to keep in contact with our loved ones? There always seems to be something else that we need to do instead. Life is too short to not make the time to visit our family and friends. Too soon we are gone.
34 syllables present and correct. nice touches of alliteration in lines 2 and 5.
Good luck in the voting booth.
Best wishes, Debra :)

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 01-Jun-2019
    Thanks, Debra.
    Sadly, this is a true story for me. The photo is of my Uncle Ray who passed away on Thursday night.
reply by Debra White on 01-Jun-2019
    I?m so sorry to hear that :(
    Sending love and sympathy x
Comment from royowen
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What a very sad vent, Uncle Ray dying, having lost many friends and family over the years I can testify it's nevrr easy to lose loved ones, well done, an excellent entry in this 34 syllable contest, good luck, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 31-May-2019


reply by the author on 31-May-2019
    Thanks, Roy.
    Sadly, this is a true story for me.
reply by royowen on 31-May-2019
    So sorry
Comment from Y. M. Roger
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Wow. That one just hits the reader right where they are...no matter who they are. Your selected words tell a complete story for which we can change the ending...! ;) Great job and best of luck at the polls! ;)

 Comment Written 31-May-2019


reply by the author on 31-May-2019
    Thanks!
    Sadly, a true story for me.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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This is unfortunately true for many, families drift apart and don't see each other and then it is too late. A sad write and I counted 33 syllables? best wishes, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 31-May-2019


reply by the author on 31-May-2019
    Thanks, Dolly.
    I will check they syllable count again.
Comment from Teri7
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This is a very well written 34 syllable poem you have penned for the writing prompt. You wrote about a missed opportunity and regret. You used very good descriptive words and very nice picture. Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 31-May-2019


reply by the author on 31-May-2019
    Thanks, Teri.
    Sadly, a true story for me. The picture is my uncle Ray who passed away last night.
reply by Teri7 on 31-May-2019
    I am so sorry for your loss! prayers!