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Lead Me Not Into Temptation

fighting temptation

8 total reviews 
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written poem about the fast food in the store that are a temptation although we know we should not we cannot help ourselves when it has our favorite toppings.

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2019


reply by the author on 15-Jul-2019
    Thank you for the review!
Comment from Sally Law
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Oh, I wish this truly tempted me as I've eaten it so much it has lost it zest. However, I do understand the longing penned her for a sandwiches or something tempting, unfortunately, it's usually sweet.
Sending you my best today as always and in the contest,
Sally :+)

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2019


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    Thanks for the review!
Comment from Spangle
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This is a yummy posting...especially so because I'm hungry right now. I appreciate the humor and presentation of the poem. It could also be considered ekphrastic poetry if that picture happened to be hanging on a wall and you were responding to it with mouth-watering delight!

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2019


reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
    LOL It does look appetizing, doesn't it?
    Thanks for the review!
reply by Spangle on 15-Jul-2019
    You're very welcome!
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
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It is so hard to avoid or resist temptation, particularly in case of food item of this sort as if it is a ham and cheese topped with Mayo; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Write-Inspire --DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2019


reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
    Thanks for the review@
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
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This meets the contest requirements nicely with a clear theme of temptation. If you are going to be tempted by food, I'd say a ham sandwich is lots less sinful than a banana split. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2019


reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
    Thanks for the review!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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I enjoyed your contest entry, Mystery Author Good job with the rhymes, the smooth flow of lines, and the story told as it is fitting for the contest prompt. It seems like everything that tastes good is something we shouldn't eat. Good job and best wishes. Jan

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2019


reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
    LOL you are right that if it tastes good it probably is bad for you!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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He he he, you made me smile as you drool at your favourite food here. Temptation for me would be a slice of carrot cake with rich frothy icing on top! You have me thinking about food now and I am on a diet! I enjoyed your rhymes and I liked inventive : 'mayo' and 'know' pair of rhymes, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2019


reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
    Thanks for the review! OK so Now I want carrot cake. My son works at a big baking facility where they make baked goods for big grocery stores. Anything that isn't perfect, they get to take home with them. At one time I had about 30 apple dumplings in my freezer at one time. He brought them all home in just one day. They are delicious and nothing wrong with them, but if say the dough was a little off from crossing in the middle they don't use it.
    OK so now I'm going to get a chocolate brownie, he brought home yesterday@ LOL
Comment from raven meadows
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it's bold. it's a new direction. it's a piece all readers will feel in their chests. and now i very deeply would like to consume a sandwich. thank you.

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2019


reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
    Thank for the review! LOL I just ate one while I was writing this poem! Enjoy your snack!