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Mother's Heart, Wilful Child

Coming home to find myself.

19 total reviews 
Comment from BeasPeas
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This is a very nicely composed poem in which you have likened turning life around as to a recipe in the cookbook left by mother. Happiness is in our outlook and how we live. Nice job. Marilyn

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 19-Oct-2019
    Your interpretation is spot on. Outlook is everything.
Comment from poetwatch
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The wayward daughter comes home, LisaMay. Is a story where ma let's you go and pa he cries in his sleep. I'm glad you had your wild oats with some lemon with your trek. That's the way we find the honey we leave back home. Thank you for sharing. This is a good entry for the Share a Story in a Poem contest.

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 18-Oct-2019
    Honey and lemon makes a nice combination.
    Thanks for your review.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
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So many years of confusion without guidance and then an Epiphany when you take hold of your life because you are now in possession of a Recipe Book and a Bible that keeps you on track and gives you direction. The food is manna to the homeless. Your direction is straight. I like the picture and your poem tells a very good story.

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 18-Oct-2019
    Thanks for your review. An epiphany is very useful - it short-cuts us to the required direction.
Comment from Bill Schott
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This poem, Mother's Heart, Wilful Child, follows a childhood that led to being unfulfilled and disenchanted with life. So good for a happy present of giving and living a life for others.

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 18-Oct-2019
    Some hardships are useful in formative years. Thanks for your review.
Comment from Sugarray77
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This is a wonderful verse that shares the love of the Lord as the recipe to provide meaning and happiness to life. I like how you have related these concepts in your verse and told your story too. Well done Lisa.

Melissa

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 18-Oct-2019
    Thanks Melissa - it's a poem/story on a couple of levels... much of it biographical, but not totally.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written story/poem. When I am upset about something, I chop up vegetables for soup, before the soup is cooking, I feel better and make the pot of soup finger licking good.

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 18-Oct-2019
    Chopping something is good therapy - as long as it isn't the husband! Making soup is very useful.
Comment from Diana L Crawford
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Beautiful! I love how you poetically bare your soul in this one! It give such insight into the truly beautiful heart you have. Thank you for sharing so much of yourself in this.

xoxo

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 16-Oct-2019
    It's always a risk to do soul-baring, and not all of this poem is autobiographically accurate, but the bones are there - poetry is about hearts and bones after all.
    Thank you so much for your wonderful review. xx
reply by Diana L Crawford on 16-Oct-2019
    Yes the bones are there or you would not be able to reach so deep to write so beautifully. xoxo
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
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Hi Lisamay. I like the intent and content of this poem. You did accomplish telling a story in the poem because every story has a beginning, middle and end. Using your "mums" recipe book is certainly a grand way to end your story and of course I go to the last line where plain water is turned to wine. That is a miracle. Robert

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 16-Oct-2019
    Thanks for reviewing, Robert. Life holds many miracles. We just have to notice them.
reply by Robert Zimmerman on 16-Oct-2019
    You are RIGHT!
Comment from juliaSjames
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I see this isn't categorized as biographical, but it reads as a personal write. It's amazing how many of us go off to sow our wild oats and/or roam the world before we settle down. Your heroine keeps her integrity, I like that. The Recipe Book analogy for the Bible is down to earth and effective.

From time to time you slip into forced rhyme,
"did read'
"well succeed"
"I now do look'

Perhaps deliberate? But it sounds off to my ear.

Wishing you the best of luck in the contest.

Blessings Julia


 Comment Written 16-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 16-Oct-2019
    Thanks for reviewing. Some aspects are autobiographical, but not totally. I didn't want to click on that category - some readers might think all of it is true.
    In Australia and NZ, being so far away from the rest of the world and having no immediate borders with other countries, it is a rite of passage for young people to go travelling for a few years. It is almost considered odd to stay home in the same city. When I got my first job, in 1972, after a period of employment the employer offered to keep jobs open for a year so young employees could go travelling, with the promise of the job still being available upon their return. I did that one year, and then later I went to Europe and Asia for another 3 years, met a kiwi sweetheart, and ended up living in NZ
reply by juliaSjames on 16-Oct-2019
    I like that. Traveling opens the mind ... and the heart


    JJ
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2019
    Yes. Usually, raging bigots are ignorant and afraid of what they haven't experienced.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
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This meets the contest requirements splendidly as you deliver a complete and engaging story in well penned poetic style. I really enjoyed your tale of growing in spirit and in love. Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 16-Oct-2019
    Thanks for reviewing!