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Mama's Defense

A 3-6-9 poem about domestic violence.

10 total reviews 
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
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This depicts so many scenarios where there is domestic violence. Not being involved doesn't mean you can't care. I do care and pray that anyone in that situation will run.
A very well written piece.

 Comment Written 25-May-2020

Comment from Raul1
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This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It has a very good chance of winning the contest. Excellent work! No mistakes. Good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 22-May-2020


reply by the author on 22-May-2020
    Thanks.
reply by Raul1 on 22-May-2020
    You're welcome.
Comment from richie b
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Amanda,
Your poem is sad but I know firsthand how
true this situation can be. Your poem reveals pain
for the entire family.
I hope you are well. Good luck in contest.
Peace,
Richie

 Comment Written 22-May-2020

Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written 3-6-9 poem about the day mama has enough of her husband's bad behavior and take his life with his gun, wne make her children orhas and they start all over again.

 Comment Written 22-May-2020


reply by the author on 22-May-2020
    Thanks.
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
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Amanda, how terrible to have a father like that! It causes trauma in a child's later life. I hope the "I" in this very good poem, is not you? That finally mother has enough and defends her children with a gun and sends them away, I can understand only too well.

 Comment Written 22-May-2020


reply by the author on 22-May-2020
    It's all made up this time.
reply by Marjon van Bruggen on 22-May-2020
    Thank God! Thanks for answering me. I was so worried!
Comment from R.Peyregne
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OMG! I do hope this does not come from experience. This is so powerful! Your words pull the reader in, I can feel the fear, the pain, the desire, the hate, the need. This is amazing. GREAT JOB!

 Comment Written 22-May-2020


reply by the author on 22-May-2020
    Thank you.
Comment from write hand blue
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A picture of a lovely starry night set against a somber dark green background brings the reader down to earth. A story in a poem about an abusive father. Rhyming poems are my favourite (ES). I notice line three doesn't rhyme. I truly hope this poem isn't autobiographical. Good effort. ~Mel~

 Comment Written 22-May-2020


reply by the author on 22-May-2020
    Thanks.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
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The bear mama will kill the drama with a gun -
Mama's done.
She yells to me to run.
This time she'll protect us with his gun.
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 22-May-2020


reply by the author on 22-May-2020
    Thanks.
Comment from amada
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This is a very strong short poem. You have concentrated in writing the most thrilling words in a limited number. I could feel the emotion boiling underneath. I like your sincerity.

 Comment Written 22-May-2020


reply by the author on 22-May-2020
    Thanks very much.
Comment from January L'Angelle
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Amanda, This poem is so powerfully written. Unfortunately, the story that you told is all too true in so many children's lives these days. Violence in relationships really affects the children the most. It lingers for a lifetime. I'm glad you wrote this poem. It's a poem of awareness. Great rhymes and great writing. -January L.

 Comment Written 22-May-2020


reply by the author on 22-May-2020
    Thanks a lot.